Written peer Response For Matt BY: Jaclyn
i think you do not show your thesis throughout the whole paper. also it is suppose to be a critical review and all you do is praise the movie, there is nothing that points out anything bad in it. maybbe you could also mention that Scorsese directed the film earlier in the paper and you could compare his other works. I think this movie is old right? why is it such a good movie to do a review on? I remember you said it is a classic for you, but is it really? also maybe you could add pictures and it would be really cool if you added sound bite when you talk about how the music influences the movie. I went back and read your progress report and saw what your thesis and it doesnt show. Add more to why you think your thesis is right and why everyone else should believe it.you give a great summary of the movie and use good details. maybe you could also speak about other movies the actors have been in and compare it to their performance in the films. I hope what i have to say helps!!
Written peer Response For Matt BY: Jaclyn
i think you do not show your thesis throughout the whole paper. also it is suppose to be a critical review and all you do is praise the movie, there is nothing that points out anything bad in it. maybbe you could also mention that Scorsese directed the film earlier in the paper and you could compare his other works. I think this movie is old right? why is it such a good movie to do a review on? I remember you said it is a classic for you, but is it really? also maybe you could add pictures and it would be really cool if you added sound bite when you talk about how the music influences the movie. I went back and read your progress report and saw what your thesis and it doesnt show. Add more to why you think your thesis is right and why everyone else should believe it.you give a great summary of the movie and use good details. maybe you could also speak about other movies the actors have been in and compare it to their performance in the films. I hope what i have to say helps!!